#184:不礼貌的行为、破坏公共秩序的行为增加的原因和解决方法

Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situation? How to improve it?
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To sum up, while the media and negligent parenting are two primary causes of the surge in anti-social behaviour, these problems can be tackled by the joint effort of the government and parents. 


学生的观点点评

学生的观点

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A  个人行为不端正 B 引起他人厌烦  C不会得到他人尊重

跑题。这个题目没有问anti-social   behaviour的影响。

A 警察不够 B 不能够制止不好的行为 C anti-social behavior增加

不是很扣题。这个观点只是解释了anti-social   behavior,但是解释不了不尊重别人。


开头段替换词

Today: currently

A general increase: an overall rise

Anti-social behavior:anti-social behavior incidents

Lack of respect: disrespectful behavior 


开头段范例

One issue that requires immediate attention is the increase in anti-social behavior incidents and the disrespectful behavior in society. It is imperative to understand and tackle root causes of this problem. (7)

There are growing concerns that people today are less friendly to each other in public places and anti-social behaviour such as violence, verbal assaults, and sabotage have become widespread. Several problems may be responsible for this situation. (7+)


主体段一

A 父母太忙 B 忽视了小孩的管理的约束 C 小孩anti-social, impolite

解释(A的原因):竞争激烈,工作压力大,经常加班

解释(A-B):没有注意关心孩子的行为问题,没有注意帮助孩子建立好的行为



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主体段二

A 年轻人花大量时间在媒体上 B 很少和别人交流,模仿媒体上不好的行为 C 导致anti-social

解释(解释A):科技改变了娱乐的方式

解释(A-B):很多游戏都充满了暴力,脏话,破坏公物, 经常接触这些信息影响年轻人对行为的看法,他们不觉得anti-social behaviour有什么问题

解释(A-B): 游戏减少了他们和邻居和社会其他成员的交流


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主体段三(解决方法)

A 政府要采取行动 B 改变人的行为 C 减少anti-social and disrespectful behaviour,  impolite, offensive behaviour

背景:立法权,制定行为标准, 而人们和企业缺乏自我约束

解释:政府要立法,要求学校教小孩一些社会标准,

解释:政府要监管媒体,要减少年轻人接触不好的内容

解释:政府提高父母的意识,需要以身作则


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学生的范文1(7+)

A现代社会压力大 B人们容易暴躁愤怒C  anti-social behaviour

解释A:人们处在竞争激烈的环境中,工作压力大

解释A:生活成本不断提高,经济压力大

A-B:没有有效的释放压力的途径,情绪不稳定

One reason why people tend to behave impolitely is that they experience negative emotions in their daily lives because of the high pressure from work and life. Living in a competitive society, people have to work long hours and strive for excellence to improve their job security, which makes working lives stressful. At the same time, the increasing living cost also puts a heavy burden on them, and they may have mood swings when they find it difficult to have a decent quality of life. They tend to speak or act in an offensive way, if they do not have a positive mood.

 

A经济发展,追求钱B 不重视别人的感受C anti-social+不尊重他人

A-B : 每天只是顾着赚钱,生活节奏很快,很少和身边的人交流,对于别人的感受不够敏感

举例:大声聊电话,影响别人,急于表达自己的观点,言语不够礼貌

 

one reason why people in the modern society tend to be anti-social and disrespectful might be that the they do not pay attention to moral values in this commercial world. People living in highly competitive modern society would pay more attention to how to make money and earn a living, as a result moral education is undervalued. In the money-oriented settings, people are less likely to spend much time on learning some moral principles and social rules because they may be under huge financial pressure of high house prices or living costs from all aspects of life. The lack of basic moral awareness might mean that these people do not have a clear idea about what are anti-social behaviors and disrespect for others, so they may sometimes act impolitely in their life.       

 

A 注意公众的教育 B让大家调整心态,懂得控制情绪 C 减少anti-social behavior

解释(A-B):生活不开心的时候,要懂得用合理的方式调节情绪,而不是用不好的方式发泄

解释(A-B):生活的重心要对,不只是赚钱,要多点关注社区和家庭生活,要懂得建立友好的社区也很重要

 

To reduce anti-social behavior, the government should pay attention to education, teaching the public how to manage emotions and adjust the mindset. When people are unhappy or anxious, they should find the right outlets for negative emotions, instead of expressing feelings by swearing, drinking alcohol, yelling at others or even physical assaults. Meanwhile, they should put priorities right: they should not be obsessed with making money. They should realise the happiness they can gain when they spend time socializing with others and giving a helping hand to other members of society. If they are compassionate and friendly,  communities will see a drop in anti-social behavior. 



学生范文2(7)

It seems that anti-social and disrespectful behaviour has become more commonplace than ever before. The media as well as the economic divide in society is responsible for this disturbing trend, and the government should take action to reduce these kinds of behaviour.

A  媒体  B 人们习惯了不好的行为 C 

解释(A-B):接触很多媒体的信息

举例:玩游戏,有很多暴力的行为

解释(B-C):意识不到后果,这种行为可以发泄情绪

People are anti-social and disrespectful because they have got used to poor beheaviour they see in the media. They are exposed to information about impolite behavior shown in films, TV shows, social media and computer games every day. For example, when they play games, they can see many acts of violence, such as physically attacking others and damaging properties.They copy such behavior as they do not realize full consequences and they think these are acceptable ways to release negative emotions.

 

A 贫富差距变大 B大家不满意社会 C

解释(A-B):觉得社会资源分配不均,自己生活水平不好

举例:学费,医疗费用觉得很高

解释(B-C):怨气很重,对社会其他的人很粗鲁,发泄怒气

The widening gap between rich and poor also makes people unfriendly and impolite as they have resentment against society. They complain about the unfair distribution of income and the standard of living. Some of them even have difficulty in afford tuition fees of their children, and medical expenses of their family. They are hostile to to other members of society and talk in unfriendly manners to others. It is not easy to maintain a sense of neighbourliness in communities, and violence can erupt from time to time in public places when they have arguments.

 

A 政府实施政策  C 减少不礼貌和反社会的行为

解释:政府可以控制媒体,减少暴力等内容

解释:政府可以鼓励慈善活动,让有钱的人多帮助穷人,让社区有爱

To solve these problems, the government can implement some policies. Firstly, it is important to regulate the media and curtail violent content, for example, by censoring games that contain acts of violence. This can reduce the exposure of young people to violent imagery and the information about different forms of anti-social behaviour, such as fighting and yelling at strangers. Meanwhile, the government can encourage people, especially the upper class, to engage in charity work. If wealthy people give a helping hand to the disadvantaged, it can promote compassion in society. People would be friendly and polite to each other if they know they live in a community where they can gain support from others whenever they need it.

 

In conclusion, the increase in anti-social and impolite behaviour can be attributed to violence in the media and the worsening income disparity. Both can be addressed to some extent by government action. 


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